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Reflection
Does this work tell a story? I don't think this piece of writing tells a story but I think it tells how society is today. It shows that people who grew up either in the upper class or near the upper class have it easier because they receive more opportunities than the people in the lower class do.
What did you learn about yourself as you worked on this piece? I learned that in order for me to reach the goals of my American Dream I'm going to have to work hard. I'm going to have to put a lot of effort into not only my work buy myself as well. Pushing myself is something I am going to have to do everyday in order to be able to achieve my American Dream.
If someone else were looking at this piece, what might they learn about who you are? If someone else was reading this writing piece I think they would realize that not only do I have to work hard to achieve my goals but everyone has to work hard. Some people have to work harder than others and push themselves harder than others but overall everyone has to push themselves and put effort into their goals in order to achieve their american dream.
What is one goal you would like to set for yourself next time? I would like to not have quote bombs in my essay. Its kind of hard for me to introduce the quote but I eventually get to that point of doing it but its definitely more difficult.
Suggested Area of Improvement
1. Quote citation + punctuation (MLA Format) In order to cite a quote you have too put the quote in quotation marks and then if it is from a book you would put the authors last name and page number, but if its from an article you would put the authors last name. owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/03/ http://www.easybib.com/guides/citation-guides/mla-format/how-to-cite-a-parenthetical-citations-mla/
2. Transition Words in Body Paragraph Transition words are used when you either move onto another paragraph in your writing piece or another topic in your paragraph. It makes it smoother and instead of choppy and going right from one thing to another. (picture below Improvements) www.smart-words.org/linking-words/transition-words.html https://msu.edu/~jdowell/135/transw.html
3. Incorporating evidence that supports the supporting details in the body paragraph Supporting details help support the main idea. It tells you more about what the main idea is and it makes it stronger because you have evidence and proof of your main idea. www2.actden.com/writ_den/tips/paragrap/support.htm http://www.studyzone.org/testprep/ela4/h/supportingdetailsl4.cfm