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What problems did you encounter while working on this piece? How did you solve them? A problem that I had with this essay was trying to include quotes that would go along with my topic. It was easy for me to find quote regarding my topic to the real world, but when it came to the book it was hard to find a quote that would relate to the real world. I solved it by trying to find some quotes in the book and taking them and relating what they meant to the real world instead of inserting quotes into my essay.
What did/do you find frustrating about it? What I found frustrating was trying to relate this book that was written back in time, to the v modern world. It was fustrating to try and find the quotes in the book that related to the specific topic of my essay. What grade would you give it? Why? To be honest I probably would've given it the same grade. There are areas of improvement that are noticeable as too where I need to improve. As well as I have no quotes from the book because it was hard to find an exact quote that related to my specific topic.
What things you might want more help on? I think I definetly need help with finding quotes that fit with my topic and can help explain the topic a little bit more. With relating this book to the real world was harder than I thought it was going to be. I also think I need more help with writing topic sentances. That seems to be a reccuring area of improvement for me. They seem to be more on the week side then they do on the strong side and need to be more of an argument rather then a telling sentance.
Suggested Areas of Improvement
1. Avoid Fragment Sentances Fragment Sentance: A phrase or clause written as a sentence but lacking an element, as a subject or verb, that would enable it to function as an independent sentence http://www.dummies.com/education/language-arts/grammar/how-to-avoid-writing-sentence-fragments/ https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/620/01/
2. No contractions in formal writing Contraction: combine a pronoun or noun and a verb, or a verb and not, in a shorter form. http://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/grammar/british-grammar/writing/contractions http://www.kentlaw.edu/academics/lrw/grinker/LwtaContractions.htm
3. Be specific in thesis and topic sentences Thesis: states the main idea of a writing assignment and helps control the ideas within the paper Topic sentence: a sentence that expresses the main idea of the paragraph that which it occurs http://writingcenter.unc.edu/handouts/thesis-statements/ http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/writing/how-to-write-a-good-topic-sentence